edited Stalker treatment

07.10.16 PLANNING: OUR RESEARCH.

Research
I have researched how to write a treatment . I used Future Learn and Frank Ash a renowned creative consultant that has done talks at the BBC and more places.  

• "So, if you’re aiming for your film to reach a large audience online, making sure it has universal appeal will be key. We’ll be thinking about this in more practical terms later in the week, but let’s bring Frank Ash’s points together with the last step’s concerns:
  
  
• Think about your favourite book or film or any ‘good story’ you recently watched online, could you sum up its narrative into ‘one elegant sentence’ to provide its ‘topline’?
• What was its big story question, and how important was it to your appreciation of the text?"

 Thanks for the presentation to The University of Birmingham and FutureLearn:
Video © BBC, Text © University of Birmingham   


Top line
A stalker approaches his victim and shows her the photos he has taken, which leaves the girl wondering about her next move.

Big Question

How is he getting these photos? What will the girl do? What will the boy do next?

Treatment

Stalk - An attractive girl who is liked by all boys and hated by all girls is walking home from the station from school when she is approached by a boy from another school who she had once rejected, she asks him "who are you" and he answers "don’t you remember? Chris who you called an "ugly loser" no?" she says "no go away." (At this point we would show a flashback of her saying this to him over snapchat or Instagram direct message and it would show close ups of both of their phones and then close ups of both of their faces were the girl Elle would look at her phone and shake her head and giggle because an ugly boy has just flirted with her. On the other hand Chris would look at his phone and then a close up of his very angry face). She then brushes his shoulder as she walks away. There is then a close up on Chris who says "You will be seeing a lot more of me" and pulls out three pictures of the girl that he had taken from her home. When they meet next the girl sees these photos and questions how he got them and he responds with "don't worry how I got them just no I have them."

Then she heads home, then there is a wide shut of her going through the door then shutting it all in the same shot. After she has gone inside, then there will be an extreme close up of the tap dripping. Then there is a similar shot of her hand turning of the tap abruptly. There then will be a close up of her confused face as to why the tap was dripping. Then we have a shot of her summating the stairs. Then she walks into her room, making it very clear that she has shut her door behind her. Then she looks confused over at her window and closes it. Then the girl turns and sees the phots on her bed and looks very shocked. Girl rushes over and picks up the photos and then there is a close up of her looking terrified. Then there will be an over the shoulder shot of the door creaking open.  

 

The Matrix opening scene analysis

Editing

In the extract Trinity fights two units of policemen. During this fight scene an editing technique called bullet time is used. The example for this is when Trinity jumps up to kick the first policeman. This technique is used to extenuate the almost superhuman powers Trinity uses. Also it could be used as it shows the skill she has in this fighting technique.  

A second example of editing is the enhanced diegetic sound. The example is, the enhanced spot sound of a gunshot. These gunshot spot sounds are enhanced to increase the suspense and jeopardy as it puts Trinity in increasing amounts of danger.   

Soundtrack

The soundtrack for this extract includes eerie music. The example is the first time we see the policemen. This eerie music could have been included as it creates tension that is finally released when the police kick down the door. The music swells and creates tension using the high pitch of a violin.   

A second technique used in the soundtrack is dialogue. The example I have chosen takes place between one of the agents and a police officer, this is: “No lieutenant, your men are already dead.” This quote provides a hint that Trinity is a deadly enemy and could be used to showcase the agent’s superhuman knowledge.   

Mise-en-sen

The setting for this opening seems to be an old, neglected hotel in a dirty, low lit alleyway. This setting creates a sense of unease as it seems to be very dangerous. The low lighting creates suspense for the audience as they can only see what the police shine their torches on.  

The costume for the agents that step out of the car includes a standard suit and tie with black sun glasses. This costume makes them all look the same and very generic. This therefore dehumanizes the agents but also this gives the sense that they are spies and are very mysterious.

Camera work

The camera work included a low angle shot of the main agent. This shot gives a very menacing view of the agents. It also shows the agents as very calm and collected thinking about the prospect of fighting trinity. 122